I get a feeling you're into sports and really like cosy spaces. Also two comfy blue headphones and it's sound is great as well I have had this for a few months now. Reading and studying books across the studying bench and on the side table. 4, I like how you describe where the objects in your room where. I liked how you took the audience on a trip around your room. I think you edited the grammar well with making it make sense but there were a few spelling mistakes and no capitals for I Your writing was exactly as I remember it. From an outside point of view, it seems to be arranged in an orderly fashion. Inside that drawer is where I hold more of my goods and books. My room to me is the most warmest place in house which makes my room cozy and casual. I agree with the carpet needing vacuumed, I've been telling you for weeks too. Your mother might say this if they come home and see that youve left all your toys lying out. I have enjoyed reading this and laughed a few times at how accurate your description is. I'm serious it's a mess (I cleaned it yesterday) with clothes and toys all over the place. A strange smell like no other. Old knick knacks made of glass and metal dotted around to add a more homely feel. Very good vocabulary Sophie.I could imagine i was there. When my siblings come in they make a lot of noise so they get sent to their own room. Over all in my room I have lots of wall decorations that are very creative. The place I can get away from my sister and other hassles, a place where I have some good things, my bedroom. Great bedroom description Shadyn, I loved how you punctuated your sentences and it made it easy to read, you also have a good use of grammar. My bedroom is exactly the way I like it, there is a chair in the corner which is very comfortable. Separating my sister and I is a large divider, that holds all of my adored books and other well-used items. Sometimes you cant hear anything because Im sleeping or the sound on my ipod is turned off. Im proud to call it mine. My duchess is across from my bed flat against the left hand wall. Writing By Brody Kershaw. The layout of my room is all over the place. Good story I enjoyed reading it. Sometimes I play music from my bluetooth speaker and my brother comes in and screams and dances along to the music. My walls are blue on the bottom with white as the top of the wall and for the roof. My desk is probably the messiest part of my room because of the way that all my notebooks, pens, pencils and pencil cases are sprawled on it. You just need to open up your curtains more to get the better light. I am glad you love your bedroom! Colors are a big part in my bedroom because the colors describe who I am and what my personality is like because I am a person who prefers darker colors. The darker colors in my room are mainly my wardrobe doors and my duvet, my duvet is black, grey and a dark orange. That is exactly what it looks like. To the right of my bed is my bedside table, then my desk and finally my drawers. Save my name, email, and website in this browser for the next time I comment. In my bedroom I have a big abstract photo of mountains hanging above my head. Sometimes the temperature goes up and sometimes goes right down. Definitely need to work on your vocabulary and sentences as it seems to be repetitive. To the right in the hallway on the creaking floor is my bedroom. Two beds tucked in opposite corners, each with bedside tables and desks nearby for ease of use. You could make some ideas paragraphs a bit longer. Excellent punctuation and spelling. Also my room is full of stuff to have fun with but my favorite thing to do is make cool trickshot area so I can record them and post them on to my YouTube channel. Expand on your punctuation so your not using the classics to much. Hopefully we will get you some colour in your room soon. I have a black carpet with a white lines diagonally going through it. Its small and cluttered, so there's no where to move. I would say that the overall style of my bedroom is light and modern. This is to say that one person (your mother, father, wife, husband) is the person who makes you feel most comfortable and relaxed. The walls of my room are not too interesting at the moment, as they are covered in a bright white wall paper sealer ready for my new paint colours of white and teal blue. It's Romeo's line about his inamorata: "Juliet is the sun." The shark's teeth are daggers. You've really set the scene, invited us in and shown us how cosy it is in there. With the windows closed it is a musty un-fresh smell and quite hot. Lastly how it looks. This description is on how my room looks now with the layout, accessories, furniture and colours. The polaroid camera doesn't have anywhere else to go so it just sits on my desk. (My hands feel very cold.) I liked how you added a lot of description, like about the wall paper. make sure it's extra creamy!! Other times it is messy even though we tidied it that morning. I think your writing has really improved this year. The colour. MY BEDROOM They are all my floor and desks. One of the skateboards is a cruiser board (a small skateboard you cruise around on) I won at a competition, handmade by a local skateboard maker in Raglan. My room isnt colourful. The color of the carpet is a dark grey which goes with the furniture and the color of the walls. The windows have a great view out them and have stripey grey and silver curtains. George Wareing 8WH. Style , layout , accessories and furniture are the 4 best qualities about my bedroom because that's what makes it mine. The reason why it is so special to me is that my mothers friend gave it to me from Australia. I have a white bedside table with an alarm clock, a rose red touch lamp, and a blue bluetooth speaker. My curtains are also blue. My bedroom looks, smells and feels great. On one side of the room has a bunk bed where the bottom bunk is a double and the top is a single. My duvet is light blue with spots that are light pink, dark pink, turquoise and white.My bed is a king single and I find that it is a very convenient size. I am lucky as the sunlight peeks over the fence and smothers my walls with a bright, warm glow. It is a large room that comes out of the side but barely gets any sunlight and heat. The very bottom layer is a soft grey cover, the second one is the same colour then the 3rd layer is a soft bright red colour this is mostly for warmth through the winter the top layer has blue red white stripes on it and is big and fluffy my pillows also match this color. The floor in my bedroom. Clayton Kershaw Wife Cancer, A few things to fix up but over all it was good. One of the styles of my bedroom is wood because most of the room is made of it and it looks really cool too. Secondly the lighting, at four oclock my room is almost pitch black and its so damp and cold. now I will tell you about the hard wood of my dutchess, my duchess is dark wood it has lots of junk on top of it such as my watch some books a photo that's framed and a lot more. The odours of the room could be smelt from the kitchen. We have a small sister that isnt allowed in but she comes in anyway. The scary closet. cock is life. You used the right punctuation in the right places and I didn't see any mistakes. You needed to double check your punctuation and spelling as there are quite a few mistakes when it comes to these areas. My most special thing in my bedroom is my glowing dragon it isnt very big but it lights up at night time and gives a bright glow of rainbow colors. You have had a few rooms in your life and you know how to to make yourself feel at home easily. You may see now why its so untouched. On one of the 4 walls (the feature wall) is a dark red color but even though it is my favourite color I didn't choose it I would have rathered it be a little bit lighter. The lighting has no difference from 7:00am to 1:00pm. Overall I like my bedroom and not to much needs changing. Similarly, if you are homeschooled or do schooling over the internet, then your home might both metaphorically and literally be a classroom! When did organ music become associated with baseball? They dont like the feeling every day of having to entertain themselves at home! Well done. Does my room have a theme? There is also a built in wardrobe on the opposite wall to the window, above it there is a picture of a mint green kombi van. Soft light brown that's how I describe my carpet it is really soft to walk on and gives you that welcome feeling. Sometimes I don't even have enough space to use my massive laptop because all my pens and books and rubbish are in the way.I need to give it a good clean. I also have two Japanese swords in my room and one of them are a full size katana and makes my room feel like i'm safe if anyone tries to break in. Even though my drawers, desk, bedside table, curtains and walls are all white. Right next to my bed is a little brown, wooden bedside table where I keep my phone, clock and other items. Its plywood walls and lumpy concrete floor give it a rugged and unique feel. I dont ever think of changing my carpet but if I was then I would just throw heaps of pillows down onto my floor, that would be very comfy. Lastly, my favorite item in my room would be my lovely old fashioned jewelry box. It can survive an entire month of cleanliness before succumbing to the fall of clothes and chocolate wrappers. Im going to tell you four things about my room, the layout, accessories, colours and finally the style of the room. It's like a prison for books and random junk, and you never see it again until you decide to move your room around, which for me is usually every 3 years or so. This grants me access outside whenever I need it, especially if it's for a little alone time. My bed is in the corner of my room because there is no other space for it to go. Just below bed there are the studying tables for homework and other work. When I look walk inside my bedroom and look out the window I see the big pine trees blowing swiftly in the wind and the bed just waiting to be made since yesterday. Behind the door is a yellow, green and red stacker box with Jacksons toys in it. It had a lot of descriptive words in it. I like to walk around barefoot because the carpet tickles my feet and sinks into my toes. You have some great ideas and I can get a really good visualisation of your room. Feed-forward - You had nouns but boring adjectives 'A computer that is big and fun' add more description to it 'Speakers that are loud' it's too boring be more interesting. MY BEDROOM Although I dont really like the blue on my walls and the colour of my floor so itd be good if that could have a change. You only had three simple senses that were not very detailed and I think you could have added more detail about the noise and smell and sight in your room. Copyright Dr Paul Enenche 2018-2020. Before long, the divide between work and home is blurred, and you can even metaphorically call your home a workplace because they appear so similar. I don't know how they got there. (He is messy.) It all fits nicely in my room and nothing looks too squished. A good descriptive story. Feedback - Overall I quite liked your writing and it's not to detailed but it has some in there and the description you used was great. In fact I love my bedroom it is the best. After a long day, all i want to do is go up tom my cosy bedroom and either listen to some mellow music, or lie down, unwind and watch a bit of T.V or maybe even a relaxing film. Around my room are a lot of decorations like skateboards, medals and paintings. Very well written. Cleanness, this is something most people struggle with including me which has caused my bedroom to be a horrendous mess, no i'm not that bad in fact there's only a few messy thing in my bedroom, like that top that looks like it has old baby powder on it. Next to that is a deceptive worktop. Jordan Papalia Baby, It may be the view of the mountain you see out my window or maybe the blue colour scheme or maybe even all the photographs on my crisp white walls. Above my dresser is a medium, wooden framed mirror that sits above my dresser at head level.I often use this mirror to do my hair in the morning or put earrings in. Alexs bedroom The location of my bed is in a usual place, well that's at least what I think, it's in a corner, yeah, my draws seem to be the second weirdest placement they're placed directly beside my bed like, on the edge of my bed, and then there is my bedside table, it's not even a bedside table its a bed end table, now I want to tell you some things that really are in my bedroom, firstly there's a bath, yes a bathtub is in my bedroom you have to a really dumb builder to put the bathtub in a bedroom, secondly a window to nowhere there is a window in my wardrobe, that has just left me speechless. now I am going to move on to the style. Every room needs furniture to make it yours and in my room the most important piece of furniture is my bed. On my desk there lies a golden skull candle. A lumpy duvet lies messily on the thick mattress that cradles me at night. I really liked that you had some really awesome words in your writing that really hooked me in and made it more intresting to keep on reading along. It is the most modern part of my entire house because it has recently been renovated from the garage that was never used. Its so messy that you think if you close one eye and squint, you might have thought you were at the dump yard. The sun shines in my room which makes my room warm up. Well done. I have lots of little nips and nobs that I use to make my room more interesting. There is a slight problem with my room. When I get up in the morning to go to school, or after a big sleep-in, my toes touch the soft dark carpet. On the far side of my room is an old desk that needs getting rid of because all it does is collect dust. Earrings, jewelry, crafts and a whole bunch of other stuff piled on top of the dresser. I need to describe a bedroom using metaphors and iam completely lost i cant think of anything so if you could help i would really appreciate it! In my room I have fairy lights these are to brighten the room up at night. So, you can use this metaphor! Luckily for me I dont have much to tidy, unlike my brother. It is literally a big, black dust nursery because its elevated to nearly touching the roof and Im short. Williams Bedroom Description Just like a zoo, her home has a lot of little creatures (okay, humans) running around doing their own thing. It has the swirls because it gives the texture a bit more kick when you look at it and because my gran & Gran dad liked it that way. The untidiness of my bed is also horrific, just a pile of blankets, sheets and a duvet all scrunched up in the middle of the bed. Like I mentioned before, my windows take up quite a lot of space, meaning that I don't have very much room for any other decorations. I would also change the view. I stroll into my room and the bright colours instantly pop out. Great writing. My room is big and there is lots of space to do fun activities like board games and flips. September 2014. But that's not the only thing built in to the wall there is also a reading light that can be spun and moved around into different places, but not all my accessories are new such as the hulk that has been stuck to the window by a suction cup, that's a horrendous 6 years old! Most of the times it has clothes that cover the floor. Overall, I am very happy with my room and love the colour scheme that I have. Overall I love my room just the way it is. This seems to be a fair reflection of your bedroom. In my room I have a book on my beside table that I am reading and I have books in my wardrobe that I have already read or need to be read. Now I will take your for a tour on what my bedroom looks like. Penultimate par5agraph the full stop at the end goes inside of the brackets. My bed is NEVER made properly, (unless mum makes it for me.) Most times I just laugh because sometimes he is just plain old stupid. It is very plain with no rugs on it. Yas finally im home, don't you just love after a long day at school you can race to you bedroom and just chill out on your bed. I walked through the door and stood still just looking into my bedroom. I ventured into my room, with the sunshine streaming in. Quite an old room perhaps. I pull it out when friends come to stay. I believe this because my bright orange feature wall attracts the daylight sun and all of the furniture is either new or has had a splash of paint to make it look fresh. When I walk into my bedroom, it instantly feels as though I am in my own, private space. On the other side of my bed there is a desk which is blue and has glass as its main part. Right as you walk through the door you will notice the feature wall, its brown background with white and dark green flowers on it. Lots of mess, piles and piles. Personally Im happy with my bedroom, the only problem is that it isnt done. well done, BRIDGETS BEDROOM Look at the picture and make sentences to describe the bedroom. please help! You describe it well. On the other side of my bed, sits the divider that holds all of my well-loved books and DVDs. Continue useing very good punctuation and spelling. Im looking at my animal pillows and paying attention to the detail, their touch is soft like a piece of silk and the zip that's holding the stuffing in the zip is sharp and has a cold feeling. Style of the room is mine and only mine if anyone can match my unique style they all mash up together to make the bedroom mine. WILL HS BEDROOM Now, the layout. There is the washing machine and all the dirty clothes from the laundry in my room because our new house is very small. good work. Mabelles Bedroom Description . We cannot afford to heat our house in the winter. A few more sensory descriptions of your room maybe but we would happily rate you 4+. Bent u genteresseerd neem gerust contact met ons op. The room has a big space to go around in and has the hobbies I like.but best of all is to spend time with yourself and always relax after a long day. THOMASS BEDROOM I have this there because well I play games alot. It has two doors, one window that opens slightly and two loud heaters that break the cold silence in the night. well done kaden it does sound like your room. The grey carpet is soft and oddly soothing underfoot. But most of the time, me and Sam are in different moods. What a great description of your beautiful bedroom! I like my room the way it is because I love the view and how it is laid out. I would like to get a bit of colour into my room because at the moment it is pretty plain. Overall it's ok but you repeat your facts. My bed is a king slat bed with black duvet sheets and black pillow cases (would like some new ones). 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